Summer

[Evil_Genious]

Write a short poem, ode, rap, song whatever to summer as she leaves us for another year..............

(inspiration taken from Jay-Z - Dear Summer)..

[StyLeZ]

summer you annoying curse
making me sweat during the most important verse
that period only got tougher in the intense heat
dam examinations made me have cold feet

tick tock the clock was running
revision had me cringe and sweating
3 weeks was all i had, fuck the children
playground noise was living me sad




















ps. ill do more later

[Spider Pig]

Dear Summer, why have you left so soon
we're used to the sun, now were being mooned
that's not something we look forward too
but we'll get through, see you next june
the darker it gets, the target is theft
sunshine brought smiles and memories we've kept
so now you've left, giving us 2months at best
were sad because we know what to expect next
I guess we should appreciate you more
but your meant to be a quarter, one of four
instead you cut short your tour
peeking through before closing the door
even when you arrive we expect rain pour
now were wating, expecting like were pregnant
9 more months until the next segment

that was shit and quick lol I'll do a proper one when I get time and can be bothered

[Evil_Genious]

Seems like the Summers get colder every year
seems my emotions get colder every year
every cycle brings yet more dissapointments
going psycho, more pills more Doctor's appointments
Doc says it's mental and nothing wrong with me
but look, if there ain't and I'm here
ain't that what is going wrong with me?
she asked me if I'm happy, if I'm in a relationship
I said I thought I was but nowadays she don't visit
she don't speak to me the same
she never calls me by my first name
it's a shame coz as a young child
the way she used to look was the way I used to smile
flowery dress, youthful skin and a soft warm smile
understated, but she was stronger than I used to be
and often she would lay a beat down on me
but I was busy having fun wouldn't ever let it get to me
we used to play but never told her how much I loved her
busy fighing and playing, I was supposed to be much tougher
too consumed to care didn't give any appreciation
never told her about my joy about my deep elation
and when evening come her time was up and so was mines
it was cool, I know tomorrow she would be all mines
I don't understand why you went away, why you never stayed
but now we're older and our connection has started to wade
damn I miss those days we used to spend chillin in the shade
when I was with you Summer, I didn't realise I had it made.

[queen bee]

It started. There was a heightened state of bliss when she came around
I couldn’t see through the plight, so I opened my blinds to her sunlight,
and found all my mental hardships had departed

We fought against the wind. Eyes closed.. How she’d gently kiss my skin
I’d feel a song and dance come from within, ...adrenaline? Must have been
the buzz against my lips, that stare, she made me blush when ever she touched me there

She’d leave at times, for a few hours, maybe days.. she had her reasons, I know..
I couldn’t raise my gaze.. so ashamed, that I’d spent time with the other seasons

The grey is suppressing the joy i’ve most recently felt. I think she’s leaving
medkomeofkpekfep rubbish, it's not working.

[queen bee]

Wow, I absolutely loved this. For a minute I lost track that this was about 'Summer', so it was even nicer coming to the end! Very nicely written EG.

understated, but she was stronger than I used to be
and often she would lay a beat down on me

Nice word play here!

[Evil_Genious]

LOL many thanks Bee....

[Rab C Nesbit]

Budden Face.
That's Divine Scripture.

When I get a bit of time to ponder and reflect, I'll do a Summer piece, too.

[Rab C Nesbit]

You've finished the last of the ironing, and you've packed your clothes.
This year's days spent together will become a blur,
like last year's and the year before...
It's so easy for you, Summer.

So easy to breeze into my life,
with your flowing golden locks,
and that strut of confidence.

Summer, you ooze that energy,
so infectious that those who get touched by your rays,
emulate your radiating persona.

You bring with you music, energy, and heat.
Energy and Heat that encourages passionate lovers to sneak,
out to the stream to quench their thirst,
and take refuge from your suffocation.

...but you're welcomed with open arms.

Always.

Always leaving memories for people to hold on to...

Summer, yours and my memories will fizzle,
into but a warm feeling at the pit of my stomach,
when the wind blows.

You touch me, and I ponder... my mind wanders.
It's you who helps me to remember.
...and now,
I'll have to remember you,
for another six months or so.

How many nights will I spend thinking of your warm embrace?
Dreaming of that May afternoon,
where you covered me with your silkened hair, as you showered firm kisses down my neck and back.

Summer, your grip on my hand is loosening,
you stroke my cheek, and lull me into comfort...
...but you'll leave me, again.
Your bags are at the door, and when I wake up,
it won't be you holding me from behind,
but a cold breeze reminding me of your absence.

[Guji-Ji]

Liking everybody's words.

Here's my attempt.

Summer you come and you go,
Sometimes your fast and sometimes your slow,
But come September and October and your destined to go,
My summers are dull and boring, usually nothing happens to me,
But this summer something happened which I hadn't expected to see,
Something that got me smiling and thinking introspectively,
I found a light, a glow, something that pulled me out of my seclusion,
I'm not sure whether it's real or am I just a part of an illusion,
At the moment I'm in constant confusion at this mental intrusion,
Going to see how this pans out, maybe it's really the start of something great,
Or maybe its not and this is just a temporary state,
I don't know, I guess I'm going to think and to wait,
Whatever the case of I know I'll look back to Summer 09,
And think fondly of the time I saw the light for the first time...

[Guji-Ji]

Ouch, I completely missed the point, didn't I? =S

[Evil_Genious]

Not really: Had Summer mentioned in there and you twisted it in your own direction, which is alllll good!

BTW that was one of the best contributions to this thread.....

[Spider Pig]

nah guj that was good

[StyLeZ]

you know i read yours, then i read back to mine...mine sounds like i have alot of hate in my writing and simplicity...hmm i gotta go deeper...

top shiz by the rest of u tho...

[Spider Pig]

it's not a competition so post whatever you want regardless of whether others comment or not, if you keep at it you will see improvement like with guji